New Year Day
Every year on 1st January is New Year Day. This
day is holiday and everybody in the world has a party and activities. Someone
have a party and activities with their family, their friends or lover. But for
me, I had a party and activities with my family.
In my opinion, I think that New Year
Day are fun and relax. I did some activities with my family. On New Year eve my
younger brother and I decorate my home by
balloon
and rain bow. After that my mother and I prepare a food for a party. In the
evening, I had dinner and sing a song with my family until 12.00 p.m. my father
light the firework. On New Year Day, I had breakfast with my family and my father
gave some money for me. And the last we played football and watched animation
cartoon together. I had fun and enjoyed very much.
Above all, are my activities on New Year Day. Even though it is a short time, it is a good memory for me.
Some sentences you should use past tense and you should read the article carefully. You write well and the story is interesting.
ตอบลบIn paragraph 2 lines 5,7,9,10 The word "decorate, prepare, sing,light respectively" that it should be past simple.
ตอบลบIn paragraph 2 lines 6, The word "rain bow" that you should write "rainbow"
In paragraph 2 lines 9, You should write the word that "sing a song" be sang songs because you sang many song until 12.00 pm.
Your content is interesting.
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ตอบลบYou should use past tense for your story and should change color of sentences.
ตอบลบYou should rewrite your story again because I want to read more interesting story, and you should also check your verb tense carefully.
ตอบลบWow! Thanks for information of the New Year Day.
ตอบลบA little error of you
-On New Year eve my younger brother and I decorate my home by
Should add a comma "On New Year eve, my younger brother and I decorate my home by""
In addition, Should check your verb tenses carefully.