My Valentine Day
Every year on 14th February is Valentine Day. It
is important for someone because it is love’s day, someone give a gift for
lover or their friends such as, a rose, chocolate, card, candy,
sticker, etc. Furthermore,
someone go travel with lover or their friends too.
In this year on 14th
February are Valentine Day and Magha Puja Day. So, in the morning I prepare food
for offer to a monk then I went to the temple with my mother and my younger
brother. After that I had breakfast together. In the afternoon, I traveled at
Suphanburi and had lunch at Boome restaurant with my family, I had fun and
relaxed. In the evening, I went to the temple with my family again and we pay
respect to the Buddha, sightseeing around the temple, took a photos. At night, I
cooked with my mother then we watched movie and had dinner together.
In
my opinion, I think that when I stay at home with my family and did have some
activities together, it is the best gift for me.
You have to be carefully sequencing events and grammar in this story. The story give knowledge with reader. May the Valentine's Day bring love to your life. Happy Valentine's Day.
ตอบลบThe sentence "someone go travel with lover" that it should have conjunction between go and travel because they are verb.
ตอบลบSome sentence in paragraph 2 and 3, you should use past simple.
Your story is interesting but you should use verb tense carefully.
ตอบลบThank you for sharing your story and you should check some sentences carefully.
ตอบลบYou created it well. There is a picture for folloiwng.
ตอบลบSome mistake
- because it is love’s day, someone....
Should be "because it is love’s day. Someone...."
-took a photos
Should be "took photos"